insta-haiku meme

[chelidon]

I just chanced across some humble haikus I believe I popped out during a friendly "haiku slam" at a bardic circle five or six years ago, figured I'd recycle them here. Feel free to add your own. Best one I see receives temporary use of the coveted and rarely bestowed "Grand Master Hinode" title.

Lobes, toes and nose-tips,
Everything so tasty, yum
When chocolate-coated

songs flow like wine, tales
like warm, deep honey-- laughter
and life surround us

Peculiar modern-
day sacrifice. Marshmallow
Peeps burn merrily.

glistening red fish
thoughts shatter sing acid in
the water supply?

And two by a deceased Hawaiian comedian named Rap Replinger:

Someone has painted
my door. Stranger sings in my
bathtub. Oops...wrong house.

Endless wait in a
nonexistant line. Oh, banks
closed on Saturday.

Comments

[kaigou.livejournal.com]

Hm, I'm afraid there's no way I could top those last two. Hell, I'm not even sure I can produce anything in less than four thousand words. Crap, is there an epic variation on haiku? I could do that...

Thanks, I needed that

[christeos-pir.livejournal.com]

<<
Someone has painted
my door. Stranger sings in my
bathtub. Oops...wrong house.
>>

Literally LOL!

waxing pedantic

[christeos-pir.livejournal.com]

Strictly speaking, haiku, in addition to the 5-7-5 meter, include a word that ties it to a season (e.g., mention of cherry blossoms indicating Spring, etc.), and a two-part construction usually indicated by either a dash or, in modern times, sometimes a semicolon. They also traditionally attempt to convey a feeling about nature or a natural scene (e.g., yugen). Interestingly, there are certain nonsense "words" (syllables, really) that have no meaning but are traditionally allowed in order to make up the requisite meter. Naturally, being Japanese, there are a slew of rules about what and when and how. {G}


Distant sound of geese
Grey shapes across the sky ya --
Can snow be far off?

Sudden gust of wind;
And with no warning at all
The whole world turns white

Who cares about rules --
The whole point about haiku
Is to make you see things in a new and different way.

- V -

[christeos-pir.livejournal.com]

Actually, yes:

"Haiku is one of the most important form of traditional japanese poetry. Haiku is, today, a 17-syllable verse form consisting of three metrical units of 5, 7, and 5 syllables. Since early days, there has been confusion between the three related terms Haiku, Hokku and Haikai. The term hokku literally means "starting verse", and was the first starting link of a much longer chain of verses known as haika. Because the hokku set the tone for the rest of the poetic chain, it enjoyed a privileged position in haikai poetry, and it was not uncommon for a poet to compose a hokku by itself without following up with the rest of the chain."

http://www.toyomasu.com/haiku/

[k-navit.livejournal.com]

deja vu.

That is all.

Re: waxing pedantic

[chelidon.livejournal.com]

Yes, indeed, that is the classical, and original definition (tho' if I recall correctly, there was some degree of structural and stylistic evolution/progression, even there, ne?). It could be argued (and perhaps successfully at that), that in the modern parlance of uncultured ignorant western barbarians, haiku more commonly refers simply to the metric structure, and not the seasonal reference, caesura, etc.

And more importantly for the purposes of a slam or improv, ya get more people to particpate when ya keep the rules simple, Mr. Party-pooper. *grin*

-------
"You incomprehensible, horizontal eyed western trouser wearers,
Eurgh! You all look the same to me
How I abominate your milk drinking and your lack of ancestor worship
and your failure to eat your lunch out of little boxes
Silence!
Unceremonious rice pudding eater
How I despise your lack of subtlety and your joined up writing
You who have never committed ritual suicide in your life!"
Terry Jones, "Erik the Viking"

...

[devbrain.livejournal.com]

My life was complete
Before reading this journal
Now bird needs a phone

Re: waxing pedantic

[christeos-pir.livejournal.com]

BTW, in case it was unclear, those three are mine, not stolen.

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[chelidon.livejournal.com]

So far, you win. Not only because you're the only entry, but it doesn't hurt ;>

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[chelidon.livejournal.com]

oh, whoops. Shows how observant I am.

Re: waxing pedantic

[chelidon.livejournal.com]

oh, well then...*proper* haikus. Hmm. Hard to beat ;> I'm fond of the yas.

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[devbrain.livejournal.com]

That is good to know /
I've never won anything /
before in my life




(previous entry wordsmithed since I worked out how to call her Cloudy and not just "bird" -- My life was complete / then I read your journal and / cloudy needs a phone)

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[devbrain.livejournal.com]

Observant chelidon /
reads all his entries and then /
makes informed choices

Re: waxing pedantic

[christeos-pir.livejournal.com]

Nah, all the real ones are here.

- V -

Re: waxing pedantic

[chelidon.livejournal.com]

*LOL* I'm dying here (in a good way).

*thank you* for the link. Thas beautiful, man, jus' beautiful.

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[(Anonymous)]

(*snort*)

BWA-ha-HAAA...!

- Lylythe

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[devbrain.livejournal.com]

Lylythe needs to get //
her own livejournal account //
to post her insights

[devbrain.livejournal.com]

I bet if I try //
I can fill this whole journal //
with silly haiku